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I woke up with my mind in a haze,
The cold checker floor cold to the touch.
My head felt as if it were in a blaze,
As I took a bite of cake, though not too much.

My body grew to twelve feet tall.
Then I took a sip out of an eerie vial,
And suddenly was far too small.
And through the door, reality in denial.

Some nagging flowers greeted me,
I grumbled at them and ignored.
Then, a peculiar caterpillar with a monocle to see
Questioned the identity I'd left unexplored.

Colors were wild in this strange realm,
Yellow eyes winking at me out of nowhere.
A hatter not at sanity's helm,
Invited me to a tea party so rare.

And one last thing, a wicked queen
Of hearts, it's so ironic!
And off with my head is what she said,
After a croquet game so demonic.

Under a tree, I came to my senses,
And thought, "'T is all but a dream?"
But to this day, I'm a top the fences.
Is "reality" all that it seems?
Based off of Alice in Wonderland, in Alice's perspective. I hope I did alright, I was trying to keep to the rhyme scheme and don't know if I did so well. I hope you like it!
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Totally amazed n.n
It's a wonderful piece!
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xLuckyxFridayx13x Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! :3
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blackandblueandred Oct 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i liked the last verse, it's going a bit far, and adding a little bit of a twist...if that's the right word....which I'm pretty sure it's not xP
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xLuckyxFridayx13x Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks. what exactly do you mean by "its going a bit far", if you dont mind me asking?
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blackandblueandred Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
as in, you're taking into account her thoughts and feeling o.o it was meant in a good way XD not a bad way, sorry for not being clear
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xLuckyxFridayx13x Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
ok i just wanted to make sure! thanks. :)
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